JA_Chrysant
A hobbyist, a gamer (mobile, console, pc just bring it on baby), otaku, weabo, and vtuber simp.
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JA_Chrysant3 years agoYanıtlandı Yasmina_IroAh, I see. Now that makes some sense!
Bu bölüm silinmiştir.- JA_Chrysant3 years agoYorum Yapıldı
Wow, this sentence is too long. Please make it there sentences or more, it's easy to read that way
Bu paragraf silindi. - JA_Chrysant3 years agoGönderildi
I like how the writer could tell a scene vividly and how natural the dialogue are. But what bothers me a lot is the logic. I mean... The MC murdered her boyfriend and... Well, it might be just a differ sense of taste haha
- JA_Chrysant3 years agoYorum Yapıldı
The writing is good, but the logic really bothers me haha.
Bu bölüm silinmiştir. - JA_Chrysant3 years agoYorum Yapıldı
Wait... The MC murdered her boyfriend, right... Then, why it was shrugged off like nothing?
Bu bölüm silinmiştir. - JA_Chrysant3 years agoYorum Yapıldı
Oh no, the MC is too strong emotionally. I think it might not be my cup of tea...
- JA_Chrysant3 years agoYorum Yapıldı
Wow so long, please make it two or three sentences, it helps the reader
- JA_Chrysant3 years agoGönderildi
Very nice, I like the story progression. though through the first 5 chapters, I haven't seen a correlation between the prologue and the rest chapters. The writing is nice, but it might be better if you avoid brandishing the paragraph with long sentences and keep some straightforward.
- JA_Chrysant3 years agoYorum Yapıldı
Wait, whaaaatt? I find it hard to believe the logic here. They were hostile but then begged Raizel help? Why?
- JA_Chrysant3 years agoYorum Yapıldı
Typo, do not use ' for a dialogue, but "
