AvatarLOK2

This is actually so amazing. You've written one of the most interesting and hype dxd fics that I've read in a while and all I can say is wow. Honestly, your main character is fun, consistent and is likeable with a certain edge to him that seems justified. I like how you wrote the characters and I could feel the action.

I like this story. It is a fun story. I think you've written the characters well but what you initially wrote about was freedom and while it's an interesting story an I will probably read more, that initial idea seems to have disappeared. The main character was originally about choice. He stated his terms and let people choose. To protect his initial freedom, he lied and became manipulative and then at a point, it seemed like there was growth but it quickly wisped away as he split his secret personas into two(his perk will always reveal his identity so this is dumb). I like that there are consequences but he's not free, not truly as he constrained himself within lies and I would have liked him to realize that freedom comes at the cost of others trying to control and him changing with this rather than being forced into the open. He didn't need to lose the F4 or if he did, let him do it actively. The story is written well and the making character is quite compelling. You write well, I just wish the consequences of his freedom were in the changes he made. If he saves a person meant to die, do they become monsters? What happens when he heals a mutant that's a psychopath, gives them control? I really liked the dialogue, the characters feel like themselves though, I don't understand how he consistently argues with them. Yh, they don't agree but certain things he says should not elicit certain reactions. For instance, Jean being a clone, would Scott start acting like that? I don't think so. But I can't lie even with the flaws this story is a fun read, it's pretty well written and I think you should continue because while not necessarily what you planned at first, there are consequences to what he's done and while I kinda would like to see more growth(didn't like his justifications. He lied, used people and still tried to talk like he's righteous because he 'know'. Tell them. Tell them about what they could be, not all of it but some of it, prepare the world with truths.) He had the F4, some of the XMEN and Fury along with the morlocks even though there were problems, if he unites these forces to protect the world, it'd be a better world, science and superpowers working together to help protect everyone's freedom. Anyways, I'm rambling. You're a good author, and so I hope your character continues to grow as does your writing.

Hecate

Honestly, I like this story. A kiba si who leaves his clan. It's interesting. I like his focus on earth release and can't wait to see what he does next. He's not arrogant though. I also like what you did with sasuke and naruto. It's fun.

let him cook bro. Don't mess with the sauce.

Minato is the cook brah. Kushina would poison you. He's both hokage and househusband. Dude can do it all.

i hope you're feeling better

This story was one of the most fun i've read in a long time. I liked how he's an actual hero that's op and yet has too many fatal flaws, one being selflessness, another being love, and another his humanity. It's amazing because I was like damn, he's in pain and there was even more pain but it was all worth it. We saw him as untouchable and you broke him, as an author should. I can't wait to see his development. You ended on quite a cliffhanger. The updates are great. The world is growing. You write pretty well and you seem to know a lot about the world. It shows in your work. Please just don't make him a shirou emiya or a peter parker. I hope that when you finish this story, however long that may be, that he is happy. Though, if that isn't your intention then forget about what I just said. This is an amazing story and I can't wait for more from you. P.s. The mom shit after arty was a stroke of evil genius. You destroyed his invincibility. Can't wait to see what he'll do now and good luck.

beautiful