Mithren

A troll! How fun. Wow me oh troll. or was that the best you could do

There is consistent word issues. Wrong word or word missing. It's obvious what's missing or wrong. The reader can keep going but it disrupts the flow. The work needs a proof reader or editor to address these issues.

AI translation that confuses gun and spear within the same sentence. A lot of logic jumps instead of good writing. Some jumps are poor. Ultimately it's not bad despite it's many flaws. Someone taking the time to rewrite it with quality writing could make this a great story.

That's not how that works. Vacuum creates expansion. Pressure creates collapse.

I kind of addressed that. Nails are a modern thing but an old invention. Rivets are essentially a fancy nail used with metal. And as one earlier smart alec wanted to point out, pegs are a kind of nail. As the author isn't directing our attention to such things and is sticking with a modern framework my comment is based on that. The inconsistency of what they're communicating that comes from not having done enough homework. Though the author may want a more 'modern' alternative world setting. In such a case they've done a poor job of setting up the readers expectations. Either way the author has created an inconsistency that my comment draws attention to.

The MC self praises a bit too much for my liking. The story aspect seems okay. There are times when decision logic is poor but not too bad. I stopped reading due to the self praise.

Decent enough to give a chance. A good filler read with the potential to grow into a good story.

So you're agreeing you were dumb? Or are we already at the five year old equivalent of "you're dumb. No you're dumb". If you can't think or articulate why "totally dumb" then frankly you're not even a troll worth feeding. If on the other hand you've something worth saying then take the time to say it rather than looking incompetent. If you just want attention then we can trade "dumb" back and forth like children.

A troll! Do we get to devolve to name calling? I mean you called my comment dumb while failing to comprehend that I'm disgusted by the sexist entitled attitude of the MC and am supporting the idea of her standing up for herself. The MC's behavior is disgusting regardless of the rationale or intent behind it. But please do tell me how I'm dumb for thinking that. Or are you perhaps incapable of seeing my comment about him intending to drive her away. I mean your English is so bad I'm not surprised you failed to comprehend things. Perhaps try harder to understand things before calling others dumb and instead making yourself look like an ass.

This whole chapter is disgusting