The start has a lot that needs to be changed. Especially the fight scenes. Character traits need fixing. A bit of dialogue from here and there. Slight issues were found up to chapters 2-6. Fatal issues were found in Chapter 1. The description of the world can't be pictured. It would be great if you add one as an auxiliary chapter. Overall, there's a lot that needs to be improved especially the traits and characteristics of the Main character.
The_Broken_Author
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