It's a good start and the grammar isn't too bad. The chapters are a decent length and the ending of the first chapter does make you want to keep reading. It tends to Tell vs Show quite a bit, but that's easy to fix and should resolve as the author really gets into the heads/mannerisms of their characters.
Katleho Mabindisa
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