Review Detail of RadicalHuman02 in Hollow Moon: A Bleach Tale
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So. This man is a religious husband and father. I read the authors profile and he said he knows what he is doing. I read up to chapter 12, this story would actually be pretty solid. If the main character used to be a 16 year old edgelord. But no, he is a RELIGIOUS family man. This man has children. a wife. He treats teens who are young enough to be his kids like trash. I'm stumped, at a lost. How does someone write this? Like I said the story would not even be that bad if the author for whatever reason didn't decide that the main character should be a 30+ year old religious family man, because he isn't written as such when in Ichigos body. He acts like a teen, a very edgy teen. He even felt disgust towards orihimes caring personality??? Like what? is this dude Sasuke or something? honestly it can be enjoyable if you ignore the characters background, otherwise you'll cringe whenever this dude acts the way he does. at one point he says he will go back to acting normal after he is done training his powers but that doesn't make any sense since.. he wasn't even acting normal to begin with. He puts zero effort into anything. The author keeps simply liking comments or laughing about the flaws rather than acknowledging it. Other than the devastingly bad mc, the writing is solid. You can tell the author at least knows English and how to write it properly.
Hollow Moon: A Bleach Tale
AkitoTakahashi
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It’s cool if you don’t like the story, the author or our character, bro. Like we said before, thanks for taking the time to read it.
RadicalHuman02:A lot of the flaws I've pointed out don't require me to have 100 chapters of knowledge. They were obvious mistakes with the character that don't have anything to do with character development or anything of the sort. I specifically targeted things that don't make sense at all from a writing and logical perspective. It would be hypocritical of me to judge the overall story without the proper knowledge, but even if the main character gets redeemed and what not. What I said were extremely valid points. 30+ Year old Religious family man acting nothing at all as he was described. Acting more like an edgy 14 year old with random acts of apathy that don't really have proper reasoning . I'm guessing that if I kept reading there will be some convenient reasoning for it all? maybe the MC will be like "wait something's wrong with me". regardless of what happens later on a lot of authors tend to forget that the first 10 chapters are extremely important since they determine whether someone gets hooked or not.
Hey, man. We appreciate the honest review. Like we said in our own shameless review: good or bad, one star or five stars, we like that you took the time out of your day to read the fanfiction. The only thing we aren't too okay with is that you stopped at an early chapter to post this. Our acknowledgment to other reader's comments is taken into account, as seen in some of the later chapters after chapter 12. Your review, of course, is still understandable and we can’t say you did anything wrong. Your opinion matters, deserving to be read by others! Truly a critic that hasn't gone unnoticed ^.^
A lot of the flaws I've pointed out don't require me to have 100 chapters of knowledge. They were obvious mistakes with the character that don't have anything to do with character development or anything of the sort. I specifically targeted things that don't make sense at all from a writing and logical perspective. It would be hypocritical of me to judge the overall story without the proper knowledge, but even if the main character gets redeemed and what not. What I said were extremely valid points. 30+ Year old Religious family man acting nothing at all as he was described. Acting more like an edgy 14 year old with random acts of apathy that don't really have proper reasoning . I'm guessing that if I kept reading there will be some convenient reasoning for it all? maybe the MC will be like "wait something's wrong with me". regardless of what happens later on a lot of authors tend to forget that the first 10 chapters are extremely important since they determine whether someone gets hooked or not.
AkitoTakahashi:Hey, man. We appreciate the honest review. Like we said in our own shameless review: good or bad, one star or five stars, we like that you took the time out of your day to read the fanfiction. The only thing we aren't too okay with is that you stopped at an early chapter to post this. Our acknowledgment to other reader's comments is taken into account, as seen in some of the later chapters after chapter 12. Your review, of course, is still understandable and we can’t say you did anything wrong. Your opinion matters, deserving to be read by others! Truly a critic that hasn't gone unnoticed ^.^
AkitoTakahashi:It’s cool if you don’t like the story, the author or our character, bro. Like we said before, thanks for taking the time to read it.