This story has excellent writing, consistent updates, and a nice creative story. At the moment, the names stand out for distinctness. The use of vocabulary is impressive. With that being said, I'd like to see a bit more visual description in terms of environment and the characters look like. My advice to every writer when making a story like this is to remember to have a child-like state of imagination where you can capture people's hearts and minds without getting stuck in the weeds. With that being said, I recommend this story. To the writer, I welcome you to read and analyze my fanfic "Avatar: Lingering Tensions". It is a sequel to "Avatar: Macai's Journey" however, reading the 1st chapter of AMJ could give you some basic context if you are unfamiliar with the storyline.
Mashuk_Musafir23
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