Review Detail of vimbaimurindagomo in LONELINESS AND I

Great plot I love the way you unfold your story. It's also got well paced. Doubtless this is a brilliant piece of work. I notice a few deficiencies though regarding diction. There is a line in chapter1 where you say, "...I put on a shower..." You could have said,"... take a shower...I stead. It's not the only line. I would advise that you work with someone who is proficient in the English language. Apart from that I love your work. Keep up the high standard.