To be honest, the start of the story was quite sudden. As if you are told to ride a rollercoaster without any reminders. But, I think that the premise and the concept themselves are interesting. The writing style is also narrative and descriptive enough. Still, I suggest to add some clues as whether the characters are talking in their minds or not, because if you just enclose them in brackets it can be a little confusing ;P. Wishing you an enjoyable journey.
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