Hmmm, so far so good I guess, except the beginning lol, why he suffer so much? I guess that is how the author wants to introduce our MC to us, anyways its pretty good.
Hopefully this gets better as time goes on
Hello there dear reader, hopefully you like it so far, about the introduction, I am kinda new to writing so I don't really know how to introduce my characters so far lol. But hopefully as time goes on I would get better, I hope you will enjoy and will keep reading until the end.