Review Detail of Opal_professor in Ruthless Business man
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bland. the characters are not explained properly. everything is just surfacely touched. the chapters are way too short, it kills immersion. your vocabs are fine, the grammar too. research on how to write. read good books. can be improved. would be better if you did a rewrite
Ruthless Business man
Bharati_Singha_7905
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remember me I am here again with a new story and honestly to say I Have a new story with a new idea to see it this time I am ready
Opal_professor: i read again. The main point of writing a story is to make readers interested in it. It doesn't matter if you are excited about the story. There should be conflicts, joy chaos and everything. show us how he is feeling in a situation. give priority to a important scene and gloss over the less imp ones. the writing still feels like it's a summary. explain more in depth. make readers sympathize with the character. we don't want to read about a random nobody. create that connection.
i read again. The main point of writing a story is to make readers interested in it. It doesn't matter if you are excited about the story. There should be conflicts, joy chaos and everything. show us how he is feeling in a situation. give priority to a important scene and gloss over the less imp ones. the writing still feels like it's a summary. explain more in depth. make readers sympathize with the character. we don't want to read about a random nobody. create that connection.
Bharati_Singha_7905:Rewrite In which chapter you think we should do a rewrite . Waiting for your reply
Opal_professor: i read again. The main point of writing a story is to make readers interested in it. It doesn't matter if you are excited about the story. There should be conflicts, joy chaos and everything. show us how he is feeling in a situation. give priority to a important scene and gloss over the less imp ones. the writing still feels like it's a summary. explain more in depth. make readers sympathize with the character. we don't want to read about a random nobody. create that connection.
Opal_professor: i read again. The main point of writing a story is to make readers interested in it. It doesn't matter if you are excited about the story. There should be conflicts, joy chaos and everything. show us how he is feeling in a situation. give priority to a important scene and gloss over the less imp ones. the writing still feels like it's a summary. explain more in depth. make readers sympathize with the character. we don't want to read about a random nobody. create that connection.