To be honest, this kind of story was not my cup of usual tea. But overall, I think the story is quite good. Still, you can add more narratives to make the story more descriptive and enjoyable to read. You should also pay attention to the punctuation marks, perhaps you can take example from other books. Hoping you a wonderful journey to complete your story ;)
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