Review Detail of GodOfLight in Naruto: Rebirth in the Ninja World

Okay now this is a very special fanfic. The beginning is not bad and i was sincerely intrigued by how MC was integrated into the world, espacially since it was a different timeline than most other fics. But man is the story development crude. Story: MC, albeit having the knowledge from his past and therefore this world, acts like someone who had his braincells stolen and sold in the blackmarket. He is strong to the point where he doesnt have to fear Danzo and other bad guys, and even has the support from powerhouses like Sakumo and Hiruzen(albeit hiruzens just conditionally). Yet he fails to act accordingly to what he knows. He admits that his Grilfriend and Mother, who he loves sincerely, are being targeted by Danzo and Root, but does nothing besides watching them. He continues to go on missions, even for extended periods of time, trusting that the few ANBU hiruzen puts on his mother will be able to protect her if the one eyed madman decides to kill her. Said ANBU somehow magically dont realize that MC´s mother leaves the house at midnight multiple times, to dive into a river (or water idk) behind her house, definetly not suspicious. To top it all off, MC lacks the IQ to bring his mother to a real medic, to understand why her health keeps deteriorating despite him feeding her magical pill. He is even friends with tsunade, the best medic in the world and even at Konoha at this time, but doesnt cosult her or even remotely tries to find out what lies behind his mothers condition. Long stor short she dies *shock*, and MC is now resolved to act. Definetly not too late, yeah definetly... Well this goes on in many more facettes of the story, and it is just filled with holes. Characters: The character Design is a bit of a mix, because of how vastly different and inconsistant they are being shown. MC´s mother, who the whole substory for the first 60 chapter resolves around, is shown decently often, and even has some depth and mystery to her. Aaaaand... thats it. Mc´s friends, his classmates who he entrusts information which would get him killed with, Minato his BF and later adoptive brother, Sakumo his mentor and Sensei, Danzo Hiruzen and Madara, and last but not least his childhood sweetheart and later GF Kushina are just empty shells with increasingly repetetive lines and less and less substance as the story goes on. Whiel his other friends are not even mentioned after the first chapters, Minato, MC´s brother, is just someone he greets on the street with two or three sentences, upon returning form month long missions. Their whole dynamic resolves around teasing each other for a bit and go their own way. Okay. Hiruzen, Danzo and Madara are shown even less, which could be okay if there was a mysterious intrigue around them, but its just the same one dimensional character portrayal which so many ff fall upon. The weirdest tho is his dynamic and his interactions with Kushina, the female lead. She, albeit not having much screen time in the original, has a very rich character and so much potential, but the author didnt act on that. It would be understandable if he pushed the romance behind or focused on other aspects, but that was not it either. MC and kushina know each other since childhood and fancy one another. Yet in ALL instances of their interactions, The longest conversation they have consists of no more than generally 2 or 3 sentences. MC returns from the frontlines, learning from his mother that kushina asked about him everyday, visiting their house, and he decides to leave before she can meet him. He only stays because his mother implies that he could lose her to Minato. Kushina comes, blushes, greets him aaaaaaaaaand... scene is over. Thats about the whole story. As of chapter 55 They are finally together, and the sum of all their spoken line would be no more than maybe 15. MC´s mother died and he is desperate for love and affection, even asking you for it? Nah, we have to wait a few more days as we only then reach the age of 18. Ye, ok. Well all in all. It was an interesting approach and even though i admittedly bashed it, the fanfic does provide at least some degree of originality. Where it falls severley short is the Character Design, which is barely one dimensional, and the World buidling and Story Development, albeit starting off promising. The writing quality is good. There are only few grammar mistakes, and it is easy to read and understand. All in all i dropped it at chap 60, after failing to keep myself on track, hoping that the Author would finally use all the pillars and seeds which he placed at the beginning. Readable, but very very lackluster.