After the first chapter, this worlds' interesting. Dealings with advanced technology, military power ecetra, etcetera--if you could reel it in a bit tighter: some proofreading possible, greater introductory of a 'new character', and a bit formatting on paragraphs for us readers. But no, this is good.
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