Review Detail of bunnyrabbit in The Demon of Lust: If you want to live, keep me entertained

I would say that this is a pretty good story knowing that this is the author's first story. And I'll give that to [her?]. The world is pretty expansive, it looks like a lot of thought was invested into the world building. Though I'd say it honestly, I was kind of confused by the constant shift in perspective but I'm not really bothered by it since the author already mentioned it in the comment section. There were some capitalization mistakes and punctuation misplacements but not too distracting. Overall, I gave it 4.8. Keep it up, author!!! And keep improving!