Review Detail of Juice_9768 in In One Piece as the Monkey King!?
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the concept is good and very unique from what I've seen. Unfortunately, the writing quality is eh and the author is unable to paint a clear picture of his story. Has potential if he learns how to tell one I guess
In One Piece as the Monkey King!?
Daoof30Forced
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Basically, I think you took the mysterious nature of his fruit too far. Instead of shrouding it in mystery, you shrouded it in confusion. Events happened really randomly and it was hard to tell what was going on. This was probably also exaggerated by some mistakes in English but that can be fixed as you learn more. Has potential though, so keep it up!
Daoof30Forced:Explain reee
Daoof30ForcedนักเขียนDaoof30Forced
Juice_9768:Basically, I think you took the mysterious nature of his fruit too far. Instead of shrouding it in mystery, you shrouded it in confusion. Events happened really randomly and it was hard to tell what was going on. This was probably also exaggerated by some mistakes in English but that can be fixed as you learn more. Has potential though, so keep it up!
