Review Detail of Helldragon_xd in The Blackened Mc In Fantasy World

I think your ideas are fine but there's some spelling and grammatical mistakes that I recommend editing. Free apps like grammarly will do wonders for your work because you don't want small mistakes to put off new readers. Another thing you can work on is polishing the dialogue, especially with the interactions. You don't want the characters to interact oddly in a manner that seems far too unrealistic, which makes it so that it becomes harders for readers to connect.