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1) I may not understand something, but does the author really think that we (readers) will forget the name of the hero of this story and its system? In every appeal from the hero to the system and from the system to the hero, we see that they constantly indicate the name of their interlocutor. I may be the only one, but it really annoys me. Do you really, when talking in real life, in every new phrase, sentence, call the name of your interlocutor? By the end of the second chapter, 2 names began to annoy me. I think it's not worth saying which ones? 2) Of course, I understand when several characters participate in the dialogue, and from the context it is impossible to understand where, who and what says to use a preposition in the form of a character's name, but when the dialogue is between the heroine and the system, which is highlighted by square brackets... It looks strange. (screenshot below) In general, it's too early to say anything about history (after all, I stopped at the beginning of the 3rd chapter). Therefore, I will leave it like this for now, and then it will be seen.

Traveling through Multiverse with Fiction Card System

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I've written up to ch 32 (still in my draft tho), and by chapter 22 including the rest of chapt, I'm no longer using this style of writing where I mention who is talking, so yea...already working on it