Sorry mate , I see you tried your best with the start and the details but the usage of sentences as [ shall ] and some other disgusting cultivation words it makes it difficult to read. Even then, I read until the end but ... the Mc is a bit of a retard and the way he speaks as he feels smart or powerful... he is not speaking in the right way and the right moment... also the love part is a bit forced, I can understand of Evileye but she fell in love with Momon because she was desperate but not " That " desperate... in this situation I doubt Lakyus or even Evileye would even flinch..
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I understand the words problem. I'll try to fix it as possible. I don't think love part is much forced as, although it's in 2 chapters it's not completely off the reasoning, Evileye->Someone strong protecting her... Lakyus->For Kingdom and she's just in her teens. And now for your paragraph comments. I sure wanted to smash you for some unreasonable comments except for [Shall] ,-> [will] part. You have to get some good idea before criticizing man. Justifications: Ch11- Help in collecting information Ch12- They're in camp in the outskirts of E-Rantel and getting ready to move to capital. [Get grasp of the situation man.] Ch11- Dragon Lords-> Search more info on your own. Hint: 6 DL required to take down one lvl 100 player and that too when DL where powerful. And Ainz has more WI, even in YGGDRASIL. Ch8- Goblins-> Read the context properly. That was a single group arrived quicker to protect her. Ch6- Information-> That didn't mean they couldn't get information. Ch6- 10-Tier-> More than one was summoned and it seriously requires 10-Tier okay! That's not just my improvision. There're some others too but I'm tired of explanation. And last one- from what I know others from AOG won't arrive in NW. Anyway, get some info before randomly saying. N:This is AU. Ku ku ku Thanks for reading😌.
Didn't start reading yet but could you tell me if Enri will be in the hárèm ?
Suzerain_sama:I understand the words problem. I'll try to fix it as possible. I don't think love part is much forced as, although it's in 2 chapters it's not completely off the reasoning, Evileye->Someone strong protecting her... Lakyus->For Kingdom and she's just in her teens. And now for your paragraph comments. I sure wanted to smash you for some unreasonable comments except for [Shall] ,-> [will] part. You have to get some good idea before criticizing man. Justifications: Ch11- Help in collecting information Ch12- They're in camp in the outskirts of E-Rantel and getting ready to move to capital. [Get grasp of the situation man.] Ch11- Dragon Lords-> Search more info on your own. Hint: 6 DL required to take down one lvl 100 player and that too when DL where powerful. And Ainz has more WI, even in YGGDRASIL. Ch8- Goblins-> Read the context properly. That was a single group arrived quicker to protect her. Ch6- Information-> That didn't mean they couldn't get information. Ch6- 10-Tier-> More than one was summoned and it seriously requires 10-Tier okay! That's not just my improvision. There're some others too but I'm tired of explanation. And last one- from what I know others from AOG won't arrive in NW. Anyway, get some info before randomly saying. N:This is AU. Ku ku ku Thanks for reading😌.
