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2021-11-23 14:36

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IAmJustBored
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Ok. After writing 40+ chapters, here is my review of it. First of all, this book is for evil MC readers. I mean real evil MC readers. Not MC's who can kill a lot of people but somehow becomes attached to a woman. Second, the MC is purely out for himself and will do whatever it takes to achieve his goals. Third, the MC will never become attached to anybody. By the way, the first 10 chapters are quite rough. My writing was a lot different back then. I will go back and edit them when I finish this story or if I'm nearly there Please try your best to read 15-20 chapters before heavily criticising my work. I know it's hard not to but just try. -------------------------------------- Ok so here's my opinion on this story. Character Design I know character design is one of the things I did right in this story out of the many things I messed up. If I had a chance, I wouldn't go back and change how I fleshed out the characters around the MC. Interactions with each character in the story I think was pretty realistic. It is one of the easier things to write for me after all. The bad thing about my character design I'd say is my MC. Yes, this is one thing I'd want to change if I went back to write it again but mistakes are something to learn from I guess. I think with my MC, I went a bit too fast with him so it's like all this ambition came from nowhere. This is something I will 100% fix in my next story. --------------------- Story Development: Purely my opinion this,... But I think my pacing and development is my own style and I like it. It goes faster as the chapters go on because I don't want to waste time with fillers in the middle nearing the end arc of the story. Even then I don't think there are any useless chapters in this story. Every chapter has something that connects to the main storyline. ------------------- Writing Quality I'd say the writing quality isn't bad nor is it good, basically average. It is readable and I'd say that it goes into the story in great detail. The first 10 to 15 chapters are a bit rough but it gets a lot better on. ------- Timelines I messed up with the timelines a bit but it won't really matter in the future since it'll all be the same. The mishap isn't even that serious. Fighting Scenes Probably the worst thing in this story. This is my weak point so I find this so hard to write. -------------- Stability Of Updates This is probably my strongest point since I basically do daily updates.

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Alright. After 30 Chapters...This is my review. For my fellow Evil MC readers, you won’t be disappointed with this novel. Here Goes: What will you do if thrown into a world filled with dangers? What will you do if thrown into a world where immortality was possible? WIll you waste away? Becoming nothing more than a nameless pebble by the roadside? Or will you steel yourself and grasp the hand of power, gowing from a mere pebble to a mountain by any means necessary? Pros: Character Design: This story follows Yokuma, a high functioning sociopath, finding himself in the world of Naruto. Unlike other fics where they have cheats, he has nothing but his wits and grits. The author has done well in providing a clear description about his personalities and what drives him forward. Yokuma here cares about nothing but his goals. He will do ANYTHING, even harming himself, to achieve his goals. A wise man once said: Be ruthless onto others but even more so to yourself on the path to power. Yokuma here properly exhibits that. The side characters also have a sense of depth to them, not purely 2D carbon cut-outs. There’s no Romance, Harem or Familial piety. The MC cares about none of that except for what benefits him. World Building: Nothing much to say about the world building since this is a fanfic. Still, the descriptions are good and paints a clear image about the world as whole. Development: The progress of the story is very good. It’s neither fast nor slow. It gives you that itch for the next chapter. To know what happens next. So far, the story’s progress is good. Cons: Repetitions: Now, my slight quibble will be the incessant reminders about his inner thoughts. Don’t get me wrong, It’s definitely a good thing but it’s sometimes not needed in certain places. Breaks the immersion a bit. But maybe this is just my own slight issue. It’s not much of a problem. Grammar: The grammar is also good but the author still needs to work on his sentence structuring . The run-on sentences and punctuations need to be addressed further. However, compared to most other WN books this is miles better. All in all, this FanFic is a beautiful one and I highly recommend it.

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