Review Detail of shinraemiu1206 in In MHA as Toneri Otsutsuki

mc's backstory is bad specially the 1st chapter like you introduce him as a 'famous assassin' at 18 years of age. then suddenly an old man showed-up like 'Ima take this brat as ma disciple' then the mc goes 'goes geezer save my bratty bum please'. lost his cool when found out that he has no eyes like a lil'brat despite have a 'sensing technique' that has no need for eye sight(you sir underestimate blindness). enough of that let talk about character development. ---------------- thats your mc's character development it didn't even move an milimeter. considering the environment that he was in it is expected that his personality he should have atleast minor-to-mild anger or disgust to his parents for disowning for a worthless reason. and as an 'assassin' he is expected to be an observant introvert or an actor extrovert, those two are important presonality and skill an assassin could have considering they are 'famous' level already. and they should have enough awareness(intuition) to sense danger to save their lives. and please KEEP YOUR TIME SKIP MINIMAL! JEEZ! at these rate the imerssion of your story will be ruined and readers will start dropping. quality over quantity man