Review Detail of kuhaku_sora in The Christmas Baking Contest

Wow! This novel is so adorable!!! I really like the concept! And it's fluffy story~ I am just starting reading the first few chapters, but this is such an amazing read! The only points that I'd like to point out are the continuous usage of onomatopoeia, short POV's character parts, and informal writing style. Alhough your writing style is great, making it more formal would definitely make the story more interesting and narrative.