Is this even a chapter? 😆 Lol...but I should say that this was very good on your first try. This kinda needs editing. I advise reading more published and successful novels and see how they make a chapter. But all in all, a good job! I see potential to your work.
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ถูกใจMel_Aniv:BTW, please vote my work The Grandmaster's Rebirth tomorrow okay? If you have something to spare.......