Review Detail of Seud in A Breath of the Wild Fanfic

Maybe you should have the mc develop at a normal pace? I mean he’s suddenly summoned to a game world but only passes out once and then he’s fine with everything. Maybe develop the surrounding characters more as well? Purah doesn’t seem as lighthearted as she was in the game and is more serious than normal as well. The pacing overall needs some work but I think the story has potential, it’s a shame he doesn’t have the Hylian ears though. Keep up the work and hopefully I’ll be able to change this review to at least 3 star.