Review Detail of Ruler1 in Turn-Based Engineer

Author if you are reading this, I suggest a major rewrite on the first chapter the prologue. Your grammar and spelling are not too bad, but the paragraphs are clunky and disjointed. Each paragraph contains a bit of information and suddenly jumps forward for no reason. The reason I think this happened is because of the amount of information you wanted to put in one chapter. Instead of putting the introduction as one chapter make a prologue and then split how he arrived in the new world, his emotional experiences , how he was freed and then owns a shop,with the names to the world and shop for crying out loud!