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I actually forget why I have this book in my library since I don’t remember whether I initiated a review swap with you or not. If I did, forgive this goldfish for being forgetful. XD If I didn’t, oh well I had some reason lol! And I was on chapter 3 too. Now on chapter ten, I thought I’d write a quick review. Writing and Updates: 5 The writing in particular flows really weak. Oddly enough, it somehow very slightly detracts from the action scenes, making them almost too fluid. This is not bad tho; I think maybe just a little more thrill needs to be added to them. Story, Character, World: 4 All are well on their way to 5, but I just don’t quite see it there yet. The story lacks something really substantial on which to move forward. At this point, it’s just Arthur protecting Jade Rose technically. I’d like to see a bigger corruption, battle, or plot start to unfold in these first 10 chapters. I’m sure there eventually will be, but it’s good to input the clear allusions in the beginning. Character-wise, they’re all ok and fleshed out somewhat. But they lack something distinctive to separate them from any ML and FL in any story. I imagine their characters will be rounded out more in the future. I do see that they like each other but don’t know that the other likes them. Seen that type of plot before, but that’s still interesting for readers to follow. Overall, fluidly well-written, good story! Keep polishing and writing~!

Here to inform those who have been reading this to re-read the earlier chapters as I have edited it. So far I only proofreaded and modified chapters 1-3. Don't mind this shameless 5-star review.

This novel has a vibes of BTTH! The plot is cool and the characters too. The FL (maybe) is a good girl. I like her character.. She did not look down to the MC. Thumb's up for her. Writing quality was good. You have a grammar skills there. (Just need a little polishing) World background and character design was properly introduced.. Nice work. Keep it up!👍👍

What I like about this story is the MC's determination to be stronger (skill+mastery). The family hierarchy was easy to get the gist of to. I like the MC's friendships. The pacing is good. There's definitely a lot that needs to be worked on with this story. I recommend reading some similar native English stories like Harry Potter. As I think they may help you with ideas on drawing out more distinctions and subtleties of the characters. You have a potential good story here. With some fine tuning and tightening it can go far. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing.

All in all, the writing is pretty good. I loved the opening and world-building. There are a few grammar mistakes here and there, and the wording can get a bit redundant. The tenses need to stay consistent throughout the story. There is one thing that I want to point out. The author does it frequently. [ "Why am I even thinking of these foolish things.", Arthur said inwardly to himself. ] It should be: [ "Why am I even thinking of these foolish things," Arthur said inwardly to himself. ] Also, this is supposed to be an Eastern Fantasy novel, but some of the character's names are in English. That kind of throws me off, but maybe I'm just being picky. Other than that, it is a good read. Keep writing, author!

The writing is good just minor grammatical errors in chapter three. I stopped at chapter five just because it's not a story for me but I encourage anyone who loves cultivation with comedy, romance and a weak ML who overcomes adversity with a bit of a cheat to definitely give it a chance. The author dives you into the background of the ML and let's you take a snippet if his life prior to his real story. The fluidity of the words and when the grammar is correct, let's you immerse into the world effortlessly.

The writing keeps on improving with the chapters. There are a few mistakes here and there but they are not that noticeable. I like the interactions of the protagonist. And the background world is good too. So far, it is a nice one! Keep writing!

Only some minor awkward wording, grammar issues, etc. Besides those small mistakes, the book is, in all honesty, a nice read. I enjoyed what there is so far. Dialogue and creativity are good.

Like any other authors out there, I will also start off with an introduction of me being a thick-faced man who rated their own novels with a 5 star. Anyway, I am encouraging everyone who is reading this to give this novel a bite. Just for a heads up, the update of this novel is slow since the author is a very hard-working student (actually I'm not, it's just for pretenses). Thanks.