You need to work on your grammar and plot production. I thought character analysis was lacking. Plot moved too quickly in pace and leaves no room for anticipation. I enjoy or literature technique and am thankful you write. If you carry on down the same path you have the potential to be really good and writing. ❤💋Otherwise it is really good.☺👌
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