Review Detail of DeJeL in The Ancient Rare Phoenix: Colourful Flames
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*Remember, this review is based on the first 5 chapters* Constructive Criticism: The constant multiple scene changes within a single chapter are confusing (speaking of POV's). I don't understand the world at all. I can see the intention and potential of the plot and characters, but also see a lack of depth and follow through on those. Positive Feedback: Good character and story ideas. Also, Seems like you are keeping to the post rate you promised. Only spotted one grammar error. Personal Feedback: Good ideas with a ad execution, my apologies, but I will not be continuing this novel. I hope you continue for those who enjoy your book, I just can't enjoy a book that seems like the author was just trying to rush all their ideas (not rush through the story...the story is actually quite slow... It just feels like the story making process was rushed)
The Ancient Rare Phoenix: Colourful Flames
TriggeredTurtle
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I think Author-san correct the mistake, if not then read the first five chapter's comments looking for mine, I forget where it was, but know I quoted it in the comments.;,;.
LilyStarsMoonTears:Where's the mistake?! O.O
dangit. Now I'll be swimming through the layers of comments to find it. XD My pride as proofreader can't go unnoticed!!! -^-
DeJeL:I think Author-san correct the mistake, if not then read the first five chapter's comments looking for mine, I forget where it was, but know I quoted it in the comments.;,;.
LilyStarsMoonTears:dangit. Now I'll be swimming through the layers of comments to find it. XD My pride as proofreader can't go unnoticed!!! -^-