DaGoat
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DaGoat12d agoตอบกลับถึง Ser_Angust_BeIt’s kind of my first story that I wrote seriously, and I appreciate very much these advices, I’ll try to improve my writing skills.
- DaGoat13d agoตอบกลับถึง Vanix_
For my defense, the characters are 16, so of course they won’t talk like adults…
- DaGoat13d agoตอบกลับถึง Vanix_
he is mostly here to help MC in his childhood, other than that he is just chilling on a boat, fishing…
- DaGoat13d agoตอบกลับถึง Vanix_
I appreciate it a lot, thank you ! Also, about the Grandpa, he isn’t that much relevant in the story, I just brought him with the MC so that his childhood would be smoother and because he never had the chance to say goodbye. You should try to give it another chance, anyway, I really appreciate the review 🫶
- DaGoat13d agoตอบกลับถึง KingBiblio
- DaGoat14d agoตอบกลับถึง Lord_Shiva_
- DaGoat14d agoตอบกลับถึง Lord_Shiva_
- DaGoat15d agoตอบกลับถึง Lord_Shiva_
Don’t like = leave. It’s as simple as that. If you think you can do something better, then by all means, go on, I’d be very delighted to read it, but don’t spit on a story because you don’t like it. I didn’t force you to…
- DaGoat15d agoตอบกลับถึง Lord_Shiva_
“It’s so cringe… I wouldn’t do that, I am tough !”
- DaGoat15d agoตอบกลับถึง Lord_Shiva_
If you’ve watch Kuroko’s Basket, I bet you didn’t say that when Aomine said it…
