Narris027

I don’t know if your trying to play it off as humor but it’s just cringy

Unlucky, 3rds reign is 2 great ninja wars. You can only hope minato is about to get promoted to hokage

Your writing is good, how you tell the story is good. (Your prose is good) But the story you are telling isn’t very exciting. Especially this Hogwarts arc. It’s dragged out for way to long. It’s frankly just boring and just a drag to get through. I enjoyed the arc beforehand because there was a lot less stagnation, the character was getting stronger and achieving his goals. Write now it’s been like 50 chapters of him trying to achieve one goal. It’s too much on one specific thing.

Not possible

Why doesn’t he copy baristans swordmanship or even Jaimes

Why doesn’t he just copy baristans swordsmanship

Intresting concept but I don’t like the way it’s written at all. You keep saying rather then showing. And it gets annoying.

“Here let me remind you” “Here let me help you remember it”

It’s so cringe actually painful to read, author says to read to chapter 26 but I can’t.

Ordinary people write smart characters all the time. You think the people who wrote arcane are genius’ on the level of ekko,viktor and jayce. NO! As a writer you have a lot of time to write scenes which you can leverage to make your character smarter because something that takes you ages to figure out can take your character a split second.