hello, author. Can I give an indication? I think sometimes you should elaborate the setting, describe it I mean , ex. The Island was blessed with beautiful green palm trees aligned in rows and so on....
The neighborhood heard the commotion but it was already too late. When the police came Vince's mother was already dead. Vince survives because he is protected by his mother. The police give the custody of Vince to the Ember Orphanage. Mother Kelly asked me to look out for Vince. Ever since then Vince never speaks again. That was the story I heard from them."