DaoistS69MXM

Story reads like it's been rewritten with grammerly in the tone of sophisticated, three times over. One minute he has no system points, the next he has a 1000 without any explanation. Story just overall feels unnatural.

Why does he keep ignorinjg his freaking gift pack. I swear I'll kill him if he doesn't get his shit together and stop talking like a freaking snop with a stick up his bum...

Story has huge potential but falls short because of a few reasons, mainly the progression of the story or rather lack there of. Story is so slow and filled with so much filler content that I end up skimming over most of the story and completely loses immersion

I still don't understand what margrethe brings of value to the story. His relationship with Nyx and his family is developing with much room for progression. It make me more annoyed than anything when he waste time on Margrethe when he could be spending it with his mom, sis and nyx.

can't even enjoy this moment since I'm already dead bored from so much filler content. Hope Author learns to balance filler and progression. cause it's hard to care right now when you just to skip through everything

Is this just 95% filler or will there be some kind of story progression at some point?

Only reason It's not getting five stars is that the author uses both first and last name for every sentence with every character. "Dean Bruce thought this, Dean Bruce thought that." I lose immersion constantly. Just use one part of characters names for gods sake. Never read a novel that does this and I've read hundreds. Please stop spelling the full name every time, and I will change this review to five stars.

Gonna comment on every chapter until I stop seing first and last name every damn time..

Please stop using first and last name every time.... Who the does that?

Talk about useless, don't save a bitch if you can't even save yourself.