Zaccharus

Thank you for the kind words! Means a lot!

Hey there! I think that this story has potential to be very good. The personalities of the characters are strong, and you can understand the type of people they are. However, I felt that this was a little difficult to follow. I had a similar problem before. After an experienced writer pointed it out to me, I started planning and fleshing out my scenes more. I think it would be good if you plan the scene first, so that you can decide what exactly to put in there. It would be good if you revised the chapter. Great work so far! Cheers!

This was an amazing read. As a fellow writer, it is safe to say that I can learn a lot from this book. The descriptions of light, the features of your characters, and the fight choreography- all of them were very well depicted. Worldbuilding is lacking but subtle hints are being dropped, so I think more will be revealed as time passes, although I would have loved to know about the starting village a little more (and the village after that). The story also felt a little too fast at certain times, so it was little difficult to understand the events that led up to a particular scene. I would highly recommend this book to everyone! Great work so far!

Great ideas but I feel that the pace of the story is on the faster side.

great touch

Yet again, a strong chapter.

A staff pierced through his skull? What a beast!

Feels like I just watched the first episode of an anime. Great chapter.

Would he be of any help in such a state though :)

intriguing