Prince_Hikarumi

hey writer here, would appreciate if my fantasy book would get more love, I want to continue forward but the lack of traffic entices me only to not continue.

hey I'm happy your so interested in this, I honestly almost gave up on it, as to your Worldbuilding remark, i tend to go slow with Worldbuilding in the start of my stories, I like it to be expressed in the narrative over info dumps. sadly I cannot post maps or else people would have a better idea of places.

Hey I am the author and if you have any questions feel free to ask! thank you for reading!

So I will admit this style isnt my particular favorite, in fact, I dislike it. However I do like the flow of the story, when it does indeed flow. It definitely pulls your attention to key bits of Jayden's mind. I do however find the first several chapters lunky. This improves as they continue to post updates, I will say however that its still an issue of wordiness, some bits can be condense to convey the same meaning. But these are growing pains. I cannot wait to see how they continue to grow as a writer. So if you want a good story from a writer that is giving it their best shot, I do recommend, never be afraid of giving critical feedback. Invest in the author and enjoy the returns in story form!