MisterBombastic

Actually, an interesting idea, I liked it. Although 20 chapters is not enough to build an opinion, but the potential is there for the book. The author has a lot of room to develop - that's undeniable, however I like his writing style. My advice is to pay more attention to the detailing of the environment and characters (of course, you don't need to overdo it), but otherwise you're doing a good job.

Thx for the support!

Damn 💪

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Because it's comedy novel? No?

See this! I just gifted the story: Pizza

That's a good start. Keep writing, keep improving and evolving. [img=Cries][img=Cries][img=Cries][img=Cries][img=Cries][img=Cries][img=Cries][img=Cries]

Thank you. That's good to hear :)

damn

Something like reading thoughts in fragments