SevenZeros

everytime, you write. ask yourself, is this plausible? is it reasonable? is it understandable? unless, it's a comedy.

why? you need to show why, or why is what he did neccesary. or else it will lack depth.

Still you need to describe his relationship with his teacher by showing a moment with him and her. Don't just straight fully say their relationship, make the readers understand why they are acting the way they act.

It's also better that you describe the envirolment. These are elements that you must focus on when introducing a new place, first to last. Environment>Condition(What is the feeling the characters feel on that environment.)>What they know or think about it(nostalgia, curiosity, or they already know, but you need to explain how did they know.)>The reason why they are there.>What they should do(optional). This is just a tip if you want to be a professional writer. coming from an aspiring boxer.

It will be quite confusing for the readers if you don't describe the envirolment. Even a single mention is enough but if you give more info, The better the depth your writing becomes.

With his black horns and scarlet eyes, he sat. looked away from the hero and spoke. avoiding direct eye contact. "you have disappointed me, nizara." Recommendation: It's better if you describe the looks, the expression and the emotion of each individual. It will give a decent and clearer image of their situation. But don't just say it straight. example:(he was sad.) Good but needs a clearer image.(His eyes widened as he realized that he was wrong, he sat then covered his eyes with both of his hands. Then tears started to fall dripping down to his elbows...) See, a lot better isn't it, also increases word count.

I actually am planning this master piece, expect it to release some time with the same name. I'm carefully planning the outline, plot, and every aspect in writing this series. I'm not gonna stop, don't worry.

can you read mine? I need a sincere reviews like this on the first chapter of my novel. "As We Grew Apart." It's the name of my novel.

if my writing is this smooth and clear, I would've won tournaments. The only thing I could say about the plot is that it's easygoing but I didn't feel anything cuz I've read hundreds of this. but if I was a first-time reader, I would've felt the thrill coming inside me.

this is why auto-correct sucks.