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MichaelYong

MichaelYong

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Just an NPC trying to be a writer

2023-03-08 JoinedIndonesia
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  • MichaelYong
    MichaelYonga year ago
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    The paragraphs lacked organization, making it difficult to follow the flow of the story. The writing sounded overly simplistic and childish, failing to capture the depth and maturity expected in adult literature. While the concept had potential, the execution fell short, leaving me unsatisfied as a reader.

  • MichaelYong
    MichaelYonga year ago
    Posted

    In this novel, the chapters appear to be quite short, which has both positive and negative implications. On the one hand, the brevity of the chapters allows for a quick and engaging reading experience. It creates a sense of pace and keeps the narrative moving forward. However, at times, I found myself longing for more depth within each chapter. Some chapters felt rushed, lacking in substance due to the limited number of sentences. It would be beneficial if the author could find a balance between maintaining the brisk pace and incorporating more substantial content within each chapter. By adjusting the paragraph structure and expanding upon ideas with a few additional sentences, the author could potentially enhance the overall reading experience and create a more satisfying narrative flow.

  • MichaelYong
    MichaelYonga year ago
    Replied to MichaelYong

    Just changed the cover in case anyone asked.

  • MichaelYong
    MichaelYonga year ago
    Replied to MichaelYong

    I could potentially increase the popularity of my novel by naming it 'Traveling with a Tsundere Succubus in Another World.' But I've decided against it.

  • MichaelYong
    MichaelYonga year ago
    Posted

    When is the new chapter coming out? Is this book dropped? Is the author busy?

  • MichaelYong
    MichaelYonga year ago
    Replied to lovez99

    Thank you for your review! Your kind words made my day and I'm so glad to hear that you enjoyed my work. I promise that I won't stop writing and will do my best to continue delivering stories that you'll love. Thanks again for your support!

  • MichaelYong
    MichaelYonga year ago
    Replied to XiWritter
  • MichaelYong
    MichaelYonga year ago
    Posted

    Dear esteemed reader, I humbly present to you this written work, crafted with the utmost creativity and literary prowess that I possess. It is with a great sense of pride and accomplishment that I share with you this magnum opus that I have so diligently labored to create. However, I must confess that the contents of this book are not rooted in reality but instead exist in the realm of my own imaginative musings. This piece of literature is the product of my fictional delusion, a figment of my mind's boundless imagination. I have taken liberties with the truth, constructed elaborate scenarios, and woven intricate plotlines that are not anchored in the tangible world. This work is a manifestation of my creative spirit and a reflection of my innermost desires, fears, and aspirations. As such, I implore you, dear reader, to suspend your disbelief and allow yourself to be transported to the world that I have conjured. Immerse yourself in the tale that I have spun, and experience the range of emotions that my characters evoke. May this book be a source of entertainment, enlightenment, and inspiration, despite its fictional nature. Despite the book being at its twenty-sixth chapter, I am confident that it will continue to captivate and enthral the reader, holding them in a state of suspense until the very last word. Thank you for embarking on this journey with me.

  • MichaelYong
    MichaelYonga year ago
    Replied to Riley_23

    Thank you for your reply. I'm still new to writing books, so I will do my best to improve, especially by avoiding over-describing scenes, like the one with the potato.

  • MichaelYong
    MichaelYonga year ago
    Replied to Dennis_Bundi_5441

    Thank you for your feedback, I will keep that in mind and try to use multiple point of views in the future!

Rhapsody Of The Otherworld

"It seems I have gone totally insane from the depression, a creature from my dream is saying that this is not a dream, is this how I usually cope with depression?" [Initializing system] [Player registered] [Welcome back M] "You will need to fight the demon king with the other Player." ... "...Huh?" With that, he wholeheartedly embraced the request, venturing into the otherworld without a moment's hesitation. Will he ever cease his wanderings? Ah, that tale shall be reserved for another time. ... Meet the protagonist, an extraordinary prodigy far ahead of his peers, on the verge of graduation. Yet, despite his remarkable achievements, he feels a profound sense of emptiness and isolation. His family's wealth and his groundbreaking invention, a vaccine for a devastating virus that plagued the world in 2019, mean little without one essential element: love. Haunted by unnerving hallucinations that he believes to be signs of developing schizophrenia, his life seems destined to descend into darkness. However, just as he reaches his breaking point, an unforeseen encounter alters the course of his existence. A mysterious entity materializes before him, offering an opportunity to venture into unexplored realms beyond human comprehension. In a surreal world of menus, systems, and the prophecy of being the chosen one, his purpose becomes clear: he must confront the dreaded demon lord and emerge victorious. As he embarks on this perilous journey, he gradually unravels the enigmatic nature of his enigmatic companion. Uncovering a truth more astonishing than he ever fathomed, he learns the harsh reality that in a world consumed by chaos, survival often requires embracing one's inner demons. "In a world that's gone to hell, you have to be the devil to survive." - Mika --------------------- Tags: Adventurers | Another World | Clingy Lover | Crafting | Cunning Protagonist | Demi-Humans | Demons | Dense | Dragons | Dungeon Master | Dungeons | Dwarfs | Elves | Evil Gods | Fantasy World | Game Elements | Goblins | Goddesses | Godly Powers | Golems | Guilds | Heroes | Human-Nonhuman Relationship | Kingdom Building | Lack of Common Sense | Late Romance | Lazy | Loli | Love Interest | Magic | Magical Space | Male | Misunderstandings | Monster Girls | Monsters | Multiple POV | Nobles | Phoenixes | R-18 | Religions | Romantic Subplot | Royalty | Ruthless | Skill Books | Slaves | Sleeping | Slow | Succubus | Summoned Hero | Summoning | Sword And Magic | Transported to Another World | Vampires | Weak Strong | Werebeasts | Army | Arrogant Characters | Betrayal | Calm | Cold Interests | Comedic Undertone | Confident | Cruel | Dark Demon Lord | Depictions Cruelty | Discrimination | Enemies Become Allies | Genius | Handsome | Humanoid | Kuudere | Low-key | Loyal Subordinates | Manipulative | NEET | Perverted | Politics | Poor Rich | Psychopaths | Revenge | Schemes Conspiracies | Selfish | Special Abilities | Strategic Battles | Strategist | Time Skip | Torture | Transmigration into a Game World | Twisted Personality | Underestimated | Wars | Witches | Yandere --------------------- Please note that the pace of this story is intentionally slow. Although there may be occasional time skips, the majority of the chapters focus on a single day in the life of the main character. Thank you for your understanding and patience as you read this novel. --------------------- The length would be ±2000 chapters. Will be uploading 5-8 chapters per week or so. Discord: Papyrus#5727 Contact me if you want to point out any grammatical error or other thing, I don't know. Once it reaches 100 chapters, I will proofread all the chapters again.

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