Man I’m torn really. I’ve read all these chapters to give the story a chance because I believe it has potential. But I have to say: 1. The fights are just so bland, they don’t even feel like different fights at all, it’s the same every fight. 2. I understand there has to be character development but the MC is so dim witted he should have died like 20 times already. 3. He has 0 fighting experience and is an absolute moron, but fights seasoned warriors and defeats them, even if they’re stronger than himself. The guy hadn’t even trained how to fight so far. Just pointing out some things that you could perhaps improve author, the story has potential, but im sure if there were improvements more people would read. Cheers

I think you meant fledgling

Why is he always using the lotus now? He was able to fight normally before as well. I mean i just think he could have killed them all easily anyways with spells and the astral tyrant. Is there a reason why he chose to use the lotus here?

Author, great job. You don’t really ever dissapoint, and I’m enjoying the story. I just want to give 1 constructive criticism, and that is that the modus operandi of the MC is way too similar to zatiel’s from your previous novels. I understand there being overlap in certain elements, but sometimes I’m reading the story and it just feels way to similar to everything zatiel did in the story of the magus world, to the point that if one read that story it would even be possible to confuse both characters. I’m just saying perhaps you want the character to have uniqueness and divert a little from the same path. Other than that keep up the good work.

Scythe-like talons

Most definitely your best work to date. Great job author. I will only give one piece of advice, very subjective though I suppose. MC’s that are unique are a lot more interesting, I mean that also in regards to their abilities/fighting styles. Example: A character that can use all elements is dull, but a character that can only use two in very creative ways and has a unique style is much more engaging. I say this because Dylan has an incredible potential, in my opinion he’s the best character you’ve written, keep it up.

He should fight for money lol, seems easy and has tons of potential, money + followers

? She had just said she could be considered rank 5

It’s been great so far, there’s just one detail that bothers me. I feel there’s a plot hole concerning how the hell the Gracie family knew about Gorgo. They weren’t there and also didn’t have anyone watching when Adam and the rest fought those orcs, so how did they know?

Author just leaving a comment here because I read until this chapter to give the story a chance. I think it’s well written and has a good plot. I just truly hope that Adam will be independent at some point soon, i actually like the characters so far and enjoy him having a team of sorts. But it’s kind of lame to see him being dragged everywhere, it makes it seem as if he doesn’t really have free will, and that’s kind of depressing, no matter how cooperative Julius is. Thanks for the chapter

Why the hell did he not use the new weapon??

I was honestly super surprised by the poem. Great job author. Sincerely.

Organ stage, no?

Yes, great few chapters author

Its not edited yet, and it’s basically on every single chapter up to this point

Dude, author… not only is it a wrong level, it said that it was already 3x last time when he upgraded it???

?????? What happened to the other stats he had already added?

So far I think the story has potential. Advice: 1. Grammar needs a bit of work to be honest, there are a bunch of mistakes that take always from the story. 2. I expected a bit more from the fight in the tutorial, it was a bit… anticlimactic. The way he killed the level 10 goblins was just too bland. That was his first fight in the book; it could have been a bit more grand in my opinion.

Hey author, great novel so far. I was wondering why you never mention him training spells or practicing his fighting style astral tyrant. Adam seems to excel at fighting but never trains now?

But he has no actual eyes?