don't worry sir i will be back , I have suffering from some serious issue for the past few months. Thus i stopped writing, But i will continue writing it. Hope to get you support

This is my very first adult novel. I am also writing another novel named "i Desire A System" if you wish then give it a try too. I really appreciate your review about this novel. Please share this novel with you friends, the poor view count really demotivates me.

the plot is very good. This was my first such kind of novel and it didn't dissapointed me.I enjoyed the novel. I hope the writer will keep on the good work.

been *on a date (and moreover) must not be used together.

bro you have stopped reading my novel. Please Give it a try , i have released new chapters

'i desire a system"

bro please read I desire a system

bto please read my novel "i desire a system". You used to read it. I have recently updated the chapters.

nice i liked it, your writing keeps on improving.

*3 person

*weird

*laid on one of the chapter was good

comma after down

your writinng really improved, you are making proper use of puntuation

a comma must be plalced after complicated

again too long sentence with a lot of thing going on. try to break it in 2 sentence.

away from home is not necessary , it can be omitted

the sentence is too long. generally readers might get confused. so try to brea it into 2 or 3 sentences.

~prasen#2296

Sir, I have been writing a novel named "I desire a system". I would be very thankful to you if you could read it and give me a review. I am trying really hard but not getting much views, your smallest support can really help me improve. Thankyou.