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Was intently reading from the beginning, but it began to seem like an info dump as I read more. There are grammar errors and the flow is off. I would suggest going back to the drawing board and then editing. For now, I’ll add to library and read later.
Eleanor isn’t weak, she could’ve killed him then if she had the right equipment to. As for the “they”, that would be the subjects of the king that took over after he was taken care of. There was a reason his power was only sealed, but I won’t get into that as it’s essential to the plot and I’m avoiding spoilers. Just read more.
When did any passage at all say the “gods” came to kill him? He is under the castle, obviously humans are the ones trying to come kill him. And why would trying to kill him involve breaking the chain?
The chains holding him there weren’t anything special since he was already weakened. He only got a power boost after absorbing blood.
Just keep reading lol
That sounds logical but the next chapter will show you why that won’t work.
Every quirk has limits, but imagining death is possible.
Hard to read because I felt I had to remember too many things and my attention span couldn’t keep up. Work on your chapter and please, put a synopsis
Drool with envy? Really? Simply “filled with envy” would’ve sufficed
After saying “…Jason’s gear was all epic quality…” use a semi colon before describing his gear.