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Edit: I genuinely don’t think I’ve laughed so much while reading a story!
Overall it’s a very mixed bag. Some are really good and some are “You’re actually nasty” and some are even “this person is into really weird stuff”
Don’t get me wrong the story is really good! It just has a few things that stop it from really taking that next step for me. 1. Toga: some of the things with her feel unneeded and would honestly probably make the story slightly better 1. The ‘plot’: There have been times where specific ‘plot’ related events are discussed/hinted at/set up that are completely skipped over. This frankly makes it harder to get invested in the relationship, especially when we don’t really see them just by them selfs just chilling either. It just overall hurt the story because the relationship doesn’t feel as real since everything they seem to do together is directly connected to the main plot.
Stop trying to make this situation not seem weird
So by a few months the author means a few years?
Author stop trying to go into detail about something you obviously don’t understand very well
Fr this is rough
The author seems to forget that the main character is 4 YEARS OLD and makes him do things/talk like an older person. This makes it extremely cringe and hard to read.
HE’S 4!!