Amaza_Rashi

Thank you ^^

I hope to read the synopsis of this book. Anyway, the story was good, even though it's only 1 chapter right now. I'm going to put it on my library list, so I hope you keep updating it.

The MC was OP lol. hahahahaha

Heyo! Author here! I just found out yesterday about the Fantasy Carnival event here. So I decided to join. Unfortunately, I'm too busy, and this is a new book, so it has only one chapter. But still, I want to join for the first time, so I'll do my best to update this book to the fullest.

I like the everything! The plot the characters, specially your readers ^^ I'm amused that they interacting to your story by commenting and that's awesome :O

Put it in third person, don't you think it'll be more interesting? The story was slow-paced, and there's a lot of dialogue, but that's okay. This is just the beginning. 

The background story was good, you just need to properly write the past and the current situation. It kind of confusing for me. And also using the right punctuations, you really need to fix that. ^^

Proper use of commas. I'm not telling I'm really good but it helps me where to pause as a reader.

You can remove the parentheses, it didn't suit well for me.

Not sure what is a micro man.