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Thank you for reading

Thank you for reading

thanks I'll fix it in a jiffy

Good chapter, Though you have a few grammar issues and tensing problems. you switch from past to present often while writing.

'Jessica cheered and immediately..' just an edit suggestion. also tense issue. 'cheers' is present while 'cheered' is past.

you switched genders again. it should be 'don't scold her anymore.'

'that is true' <-- you're switching tenses here. you write mostly in past tense but 'is' is present tense. Check through your writing for 'is' 'has' 'will' and 'can' also 'isn't' 'wans't' 'hasn't' and 'can't' too. If you find them switch them to past tense so you can keep with the rythm of your story.

you have an issue with your pronouns. You're calling her a wife, saying she's a woman but then using male pronouns to indicate to her in your writing. there are a few moments of 'his' and 'him' being used when talking about the 'wife'

Thank you so much for your review and kind words

Thanks for the great review, it really means a lot. I'm glad you like Kurio and Friar, they're some of my favourites too.