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ForerunnerOfSky

ForerunnerOfSky

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Writing and reading for fun whenever I can MMA fan, Action fan and martial artist Current ongoing works: We Die Young Discord: Nomad

2022-07-27 เข้าร่วมแล้วUnited States
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  • ForerunnerOfSky
    ForerunnerOfSky3mth
    ตอบกลับถึง The_Drunkencrater

    I will take this as a compliment

    Ch 45 Aftermath Of OneNight (Part 1)
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    ForerunnerOfSky3mth
    เพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว

    interesting development, with the zombies

    Ch 9 I misunderstood
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    Isekai: I, a powerlifter, awakened in a world of titans
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    ForerunnerOfSky3mth
    เพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว

    is this a thought of the main character? isn't everything a thought of his? why highlight this?

    'I'm going to reincarnate again, right?!'
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  • ForerunnerOfSky
    ForerunnerOfSky3mth
    เพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว

    i notice that there is not much dialogue

    "Hey, are you o-"
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  • ForerunnerOfSky
    ForerunnerOfSky3mth
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    I still can't get used to the first person perspective, but its fine, is up to each author their style

    How many days have I been trapped in this tiny, windowless room? At first, I tried scratching tally marks into the wall to count the passing days, but my weak bony fingers belonging to a child could barely leave a mark on the hard stone. So instead I've been tracking time by the regular meals pushed under my door. 
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  • ForerunnerOfSky
    ForerunnerOfSky3mth
    ตอบกลับถึง Sir_WendoS

    OHHHHHH YEAHH BABY! GAINZ ARE BEAUTIFUL!!

    Ch 1 Bad outcomes
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    ForerunnerOfSky3mth
    เพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว

    This is what I'm talking about, create an emotion in a scene, very nice

    As Marshal soared through the urban expanse, his red eyes gleaming against the backdrop of the city lights, he marveled at the vastness of human civilization. The distant hum of activity, the twinkling lights of skyscrapers, and the intricate patterns of roads below painted a mesmerizing picture.
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  • ForerunnerOfSky
    ForerunnerOfSky3mth
    เพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว

    overall not bad I understand everything thats being happened, its well conveyed but I think some more effort could go towards creating an atmosphere to really bring in the reader

    Ch 1 Marshal Is Missing
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    ForerunnerOfSky3mth
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    i like this but maybe you could add some more description to what they're wearing and what they feel as they get closer

    The security team, clad in advanced tactical gear, nodded in acknowledgment. They had been trained rigorously for this duty, but the mystique surrounding Marshal added an extra layer of tension to their routine checks.
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  • ForerunnerOfSky
    ForerunnerOfSky5mth
    ตอบกลับถึง Tifala

    Thank you very much I hope to continue improving

    Ch 50 Protect the idol (part 4)
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  • ForerunnerOfSky
    ForerunnerOfSky5mth
    ตอบกลับถึง NewbieJimjim

    It has

    Ch 50 Protect the idol (part 4)
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  • ForerunnerOfSky
    ForerunnerOfSky6mth
    เพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว

    🤦‍♂️ this guy

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  • ForerunnerOfSky
    ForerunnerOfSky6mth
    เพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว

    That’s an interesting way of putting it I thought that meant something like gender fluid or it was an offensive way of saying transgender

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  • ForerunnerOfSky
    ForerunnerOfSky6mth
    เพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว

    Bro I’m feeling like I’m missing some important backstory, but I’m scared to go to the past chapters lol

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    ForerunnerOfSky6mth
    เพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว

    🤔

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  • ForerunnerOfSky
    ForerunnerOfSky6mth
    ตอบกลับถึง panpan_wuv

    Commas are a side effect of grammarly unfortunately, but I’ll edit it a bit and see if I can fix it

    Ch 41 Assault On OneNight(Part 1)
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    ForerunnerOfSky6mth
    ตอบกลับถึง panpan_wuv

    Somewhat I styled the character after the punisher, his fighting style is also similar as he doesn’t necessarily use a fighting style in particular he simply uses what is optimal at that moment based off the information he has.

    Ch 42 Assault On OneNight (Part 2)
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  • ForerunnerOfSky
    ForerunnerOfSky6mth
    ตอบกลับถึง panpan_wuv

    No move loud, he means we don’t need to use stealth so just kill everyone. Also new chapter if you want to check it out it’s one of my favorites it will finish out this arc

    "Since we're exposed we move loud, kill everybody who's not a civilian understand?" pacing forward, to a door that had the stairs sign on it. 
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  • ForerunnerOfSky
    ForerunnerOfSky6mth
    ตอบกลับถึง Leo2410

    No but I do use grammarly which helps a lot, I recommend it highly even just the free version is extremely useful.

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  • ForerunnerOfSky
    ForerunnerOfSky6mth
    ตอบกลับถึง Dummybeing

    Lol how it should have gone down

    "Uhhhh....I....forgot my notebook?"
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