UnKnownEntity001
Discord: UnKnownEntity#0001 Just a regular dude.
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UnKnownEntity001a month agoตอบกลับถึง ZesraelExactly so it would be interesting to see the emperor and other primarchs reactions when he just shows back up in 40k. If he shows up with his legion though that’s going to confuse and make a lot of people suspicious.
- UnKnownEntity001a month agoตอบกลับถึง Zesrael
I’m not saying it is established. But if the mc took the place of the 2nd legion Primarch and is in a different universe then the emperor would think him lost and wouldn’t be able to find him during his crusade like the other primarchs.
- UnKnownEntity001a month agoเพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว
Gonna be honest here author. The constant changing of povs is gonna make people quit reading pretty fast. Most readers don’t want 6 different povs every single chapter. The early chapters were fine with one or two but these last 4 or 5 chapters have way to many switches. Another issue, the group of ex Edd are going to be some of his pilots, then they should never be so casual with him. Even his sons aren’t so casual as to call him by his first name, it’s usually lord father. And finally, when the hell are we going to the 40k universe?? With each chapter I’m losing more and more interest.
- UnKnownEntity001a month agoเพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว
Is he ever actually going to the 40K universe? While this is interesting I thought it would be a fic set in 40k. Kind of a let down. I was expecting a whole scene of the emperor finding out 2nd legion son survived and them being reunited. This just seems like a power fantasy in other universes that can’t compete with 40k tech.
- UnKnownEntity0012 months agoเพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว
Do they not notice “loot” just disappearing off the bodies??
- UnKnownEntity0012 months agoตอบกลับถึง UnKnownEntity001
Again you need a beta reader/editor author…
- UnKnownEntity0012 months agoเพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว
This make zero sense. 12 grenades would not be able to kill that many people. Even if they were packed in like sardines.
- UnKnownEntity0012 months agoเพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว
Author I see that you are posting 10 chaps a week. I suggest you slow down and find a beta reader because most the dialogue is pretty awkward to read.
- UnKnownEntity0012 months agoเพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว
Is he dumb?? He has a pocket dimension that grows things at 10x the speed….and if it’s endless then simply create a massive farm and become the number one good crop producer. Making yourself invaluable to the kindgom.
- UnKnownEntity0012 months agoเพิ่มความเห็นแล้ว
I like the idea of a mad scientist Harry. Hopefully the story stays true to this idea.
