ElementalZ

Characters feel one dimensional and quite gland all together. The dialogue and perspective shifts constantly, making it hard to follow. Grammar errors are constant, commas are bot existant. The description regarding characters is very opaque, briefly describing them without much information besides a very brief overview. The power set given to the main character makes most conflict kind of pointless and generally bland. The initial background we are given doesn help connect the reader to the character with its brief summary. The intervention of certain characters feels very forced and doesn’t make much if an imoact besides moving the almost non existant plot along. The omniscience and time powers granted to the main charatcer, including foresight, are not described in detail and doesn’t play any role besides being there for granting more power to a ridiculously powerful character. The dialogue itself blends into the descriptions for certain aspects and feel powerly written.

Pretty good ngl, I was expecting something of much lower quality and was pleasantly surprised by this. Interesting start for a swarm novel, the fights keep a nice amount of detail without retracting tension, and its nice to see a novel liek this without a system to provide data dumps and simplify a majority of world mechanics.