Laura_King_7157

Work is fine so far, hence the 3/5 ratings. Hisoka seems an interesting protagonist, if a bit cliché. The plot seems interesting enough that I'll continue to follow, but this story is a bit rough around the edges. Work could seriously use an editor. Author can't seem to decide if the work wants to be in past tense or present tense, which isn't confusing but is distracting. The paragraph spacing also leaves a lot to be desired; traditionally, during a conversation, paragraphs would be used to denote a change in the speaker, in order to help the audience better follow the conversation. Overall, this story is interesting and fine, but with an editor, it could become actively very good in a short period of time. I look forward to then.