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Atimo

Atimo

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2022-03-10 เข้าร่วมแล้วGlobal
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  • Atimo
    Atimo4mth
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    Why would a teenager live alone in a different city/state far away from his family? A very strange story setting! And the setup is lacking

    My family resided in Chicago, miles away from New York. My father, an electrician at a local factory, bore the brunt of our financial responsibilities.
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  • Atimo
    Atimo8mth
    ตอบกลับถึง Lipovitan

    I second that!

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  • Atimo
    Atimo8mth
    แปะแล้ว

    One of the best works on WN in my opinion.

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  • Atimo
    Atimo9mth
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    Doesn’t reflect years of experience as military personnel!

    Frustrated, Alex exclaimed, "You haven't even told me what is on the flash drive, and what do you mean by the world being in danger?" But there was no response, only silence.
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  • Atimo
    Atimo9mth
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    I thought that was the ring function?!

    This was good because he was no longer afraid of turning into a maniac who slaughters for fun, and such an instinct was suppressed by calming his mind and emotions.
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  • Atimo
    Atimo1yr
    ตอบกลับถึง QuantumVoid

    Chapter 28, skipped few chapters. Good luck!

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  • Atimo
    Atimo1yr
    ตอบกลับถึง QuantumVoid

    I am being very sincere when I say interesting core idea, but I couldn’t continue reading after few chapters because it is poorly executed in my opinion. It can be better so please do your best to improve the writing to be less cheesy.

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  • Atimo
    Atimo1yr
    ตอบกลับถึง Herolich

    First, good work and keep going. The start seems promising and well written I guess. Second, since it is unclear how you will steer your story, I can only say I think Luna so far more troublesome than being useful asset to the MC for being impassive and childish. Generally I avoid "Harem" and "Comedy" because it is clichéd! Good luck! (^.^ `)

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