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"Come back to me when your tears become rain..."
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Hello, everyone. I'll grab this chance and greet you all. Hopefully, you have a nice day. So, Yours and Always was not supposed to be having daily updates because I was writing another book lol (shoutout to my laziness) But seeing many picked it up encouraged me to. Just like I said, I was having trouble with my writing software which crashed about two days ago T^T I was pretty clumsy, and I forgot to back it up, at the same time, I was tired from my studies so when it crashed I accidentally deleted the software and the data was lost :D Well, don't worry. I've already rewritten them and I adjusted changes for it to be better. If ever you see any misstep such as typos, misspelled words, or other stuff please comment so I can check it faster. Thank you, have a nice day everyone ^v^
Ikr (anyway, thank you for commenting:D)
on the first sentence, delete either one of the 'be'
*are*
*behold*
"...replied *with* a simple " yes"."
"...their son *is* right now..."
*knew*
*who*
*knew*
*surrounded*
*reached* *observed*
*“Girl, you're quite bold, however...'* put a comma between 'respond' and 'only'
Just because *you're* afraid...
Separate dialogues to give them space
A story would be more plausible if all tenses are past and dialogues are good if in present *muttering* not mattering 'think' should be changed to 'thought' as again, past tense is more decent in story narrations put 'a' between 'he's' and 'mentally' 'help' to 'helped'