Darcy_Rose3

Hello elements! This is the author. I hope you're enjoying my book. Seeing as this is my first serious attempt at writing a webnovel, I am very nervous and still have a lot to learn. Thus any constructive criticism is greatly appreciated! Here are some helpful things to my current social media pages, where I post some occasional stuff: Tumblr: https://darcyrose-here.tumblr.com/ (with a ton of tiny lore bits) Facebook: https://www.facebook.com/profile.php?id=100082620412235

Awesome story so far! The first interaction between the pahkan and Catalina feels a bit wonky to me, but I'll chalk that up to a very persuasive mafia boss. As for Catalina, she's an intruiging female lead, with a lot of promise and a dark past to unearth. Can't wait to find out more about her! The writing style makes me add a bit of a russian accent in my head, making this story that much more unique.

This is the first time I read a werewolf novel. the writer was very considerate in leaving an explanation on how the concept works. Aadhya is really interesting, her strenght of will makes you really root for her. The world background is very well made. A few grammatical mistakes here and there, but nothing major. All in all, a really nice read! Do recommend it. <3

This book is interesting. It combines mystery and romance in a flavorful way. It's so sad that there hasn't been a new chapter in 5 months. I bet readers can't wait for more.

a 12 year old kid being allowed anywhere near guns? I highly doubt that

Why do people always pull out their IV?!

Idk, it feels a bit much to insert an IV for some bruised knees. It didn't feel like she was hurt. Or maybe she fell unconscious from blood loss and that's why she has an IV?

I really like this story! The MC is incredibly relatable, her struggles, thoughts and feelings are easy to understand and empathise with. The love interest is also very interesting, you can really feel his anger and sorrow and need for forgiveness. And it's also grammatically correct! I love that. I didn't like there was a lot of swearing, but damn if it isn't realistic. High school students swear way too much. All in all, this book blew my expectations. Truly an awsome read. Good luck on your journey, author!

The scenes in Serene are done quite well. The relationship between the characters is okay, although I do feel like some reactions are a bit much. There are grammatical mistakes. Overall, I feel like this book is a diamond in the rough. It has the potential to become something great, but it just hasn't reached it yet. With some passion and a little more experience, this book will go a long way.

The book is very intruiging so far. The magical system in this world is quite original and the MC has a fun personality. The only thing that bugged me was the random change between past tense and present tense, but it is easy enough to ignore in order ro immerse yourself in this intricately carved world.